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Bam! Pow! Wham! Good Pacing Causes Immediate Reaction

Fiction-Zone: Leaps in Fiction Mastery by Diane Holmes, Chief Alchemist of Pitch University

Take the Pacing Taste Test

Does your novel have good pacing?  Here’s a down-and-dirty test for finding out.

Q:  Did something happen on this page (or in this scene or chapter) that caused a character to have an immediate reaction?

One of the hallmarks of creating a compelling story is that what happens causes an immediate reaction. Cause and effect. Action and reaction.

What are immediate reactions?  They can be…

  • Emotional (feelings)
  • Physical (actions)
  • Intellectual (thoughts, conclusions, observations, revelations)
  • Verbal (dialogue)

Without a reaction of some kind to what is happening in the scene, you’re just reporting a lot of details that aren’t connected to the powerful story engine called Great Pacing.

From the reader’s point of view, “No reaction?  Must not matter.  Never mind. Zzzzzzzz.”

If your character doesn’t care, then why should we?

Readers take your word for what’s important, specifically they take your character’s word.

If there’s no immediate reaction by at least one character, not even shocked silence or a new realization, then the reader concludes that NOTHING IMPORTANT IS HAPPENING that can’t be summed up or skipped.

When your story has good pacing, you’ll find that change is afoot, characters react to what is happening, and this reaction moves the story forward.

When your story has Total Pacing Suckage, you’ll find there’s no character reaction connected to the story movement. Not a single reaction to anything on the page (even if that page is very well written).

Learn From a Master

Wolf Pass: A Novel (Mysteries & Horror)

Let’s look at an example from Wolf Pass by master storyteller Steve Thayer. I’m choosing this example for three reasons: Continue reading Bam! Pow! Wham! Good Pacing Causes Immediate Reaction

The “Oh, Crap!” Factor: Pacing in Real Time

Fiction-Zone: Leaps in Fiction Mastery by Diane Holmes, Chief Alchemist of Pitch University

Every story needs what I call, “Oh, Crap!” scenes.  These are the scenes where things do not go as planned.  Bad things happen.  Character are in trouble.

poster-oh crap4But specifically it means at least one character now, right-this-very-minute, knows it.  There was now, when the character did not know something was bad, and now there is after, the new now.

And I’m stating the obvious (as is sometimes my job), but we’re only talking about stuff that matters to the character and the plot, right? If the bad stuff doesn’t matter then it’s really not part of the story you’re telling.

Okay, back on point, which is why what happens in the now of your story has a huge effect on pacing.  And this is where many, many writers get hung up.

So here’s the secret.

Continue reading The “Oh, Crap!” Factor: Pacing in Real Time

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Fiction-Zone: Leaps in Fiction Mastery by Diane Holmes

We’ve been talking about pacing for a few months now, and it’s time to get our hands dirty. 

get your hands dirty

Let’s put the pacing techniques we’ve learned so far into practice.

As you’ll recall, my definition of pacing goes like this:

Fresh &

Riveting

Stuff that Matters (consequences and emotions)

Happening in Real Time (even if it’s just learning about something)

That Causes Immediate Reaction

With an Unknown Outcome

That Changes the Game

For at Least One Character

And the Reader.

Enter to Win

Add a comment to this post and tell me why you’d like to work 1-on-1 with me to improve the pacing in your writing. 

Be creative. 

Woo me.

Entertain me.

Convince me your pacing is keeping you from being brilliantly published.

I’ll choose one writer who will send me 5 problem pages, and we’ll work to make it better.  Then we’ll feature the transformation in an upcoming post.

Yes, this will take a little bravery. 

But you could transform your understanding of how pacing works.  And that, my friend, is worth a million smackers.

This article is the 7th in Diane’s craft-of-fiction-writing series on Pacing:

  1. How to Be a Pacing Genius
  2. Pacing and the Thirst for Something Fresh (Blood Optional)
  3. You Can’t Look Away: Pacing & The Riveting Story
  4. Shot Through the Heart: Threat, Consequences, and Emotions Equal Pacing
  5. BONUS: Don’t Hold Back – Pacing Advice by Literary Agent Donald Maass
  6. BONUS: Using Major Turning Points – Pacing Advice by Christopher Vogler
  7. FREE OFFER
  8. The “Oh, Crap!” Factor: Pacing in Real Time
  9. Bam! Pow! Wham! Good Pacing Causes Immediate Reaction
  10. Situation Critical: Pacing’s Need for an Unknown Outcome
  11. Game Changers: Pacing, Plot Twits, and Reader Engagement
  12. Pacing that Matters: It All Comes Down to Characters
  13. Your True Opponent: Pacing’s Race to Outwit the Reader
  14. 9 Pacing Techniques, 1 Scene on Fire

Diane Holmes Crop 1Diane writes two alternating columns for Freelance-Zone:Fiction-Zone: Leaps in Fiction Mastery and Marketing-Zone:Marketing-Zone: Marketing Yourself and Your Book.

She’s the Founder and Chief Alchemist of Pitch University – “Learn to pitch your book from the AGENTS and EDITORS who make their living at it. Learn. Pitch. Sell.”

Using Major Turning Points – Pacing Advice by Christopher Vogler

Fiction-Zone: Leaps in Fiction Mastery by Diane Holmes

I was recently talking with Hollywood Story Consultant Christopher Vogler, for an article over at Pitch University:

The Story Master’s Journey by Christopher Vogler (free bonus chapter!)

Now, if the name is familiar, there’s a reason for this.  He’s kind of a legend for his ground-breaking work bringing the power of myth to screen and novel writers with The Writer’s Journey, now in it’s 3rd edition.

As a Hollywood Story Consultant for Disney, Fox2000, and Paramount, he’s worked on some of the biggest movies of our time.  The Lion King, Courage  Under Fire, I Am Legend.  You may have heard of them.

When the subject of pacing came up, he told me the following story.

Christopher Vogler: I work mostly with screenwriters and had to deal with a pacing issue on rewrites of THE FIGHTER, on which I worked with one of the screenwriters, Scott Silver (8 Mile). 

The script was EXTREMELY dynamic, with high highs and low lows on almost every page.

The overall effect was “aesthetic exhaustion.” An audience would just get worn out from trying to ride that roller coaster.  

I worked with Scott to find  major turning points, so that the script would build up to a high point for three or four pages before taking a darker turn for a few minutes.

It gave the audience a chance to enjoy and share in the hero’s triumphs before the next twist in the road.

I love this advice for two very important reasons.

#1 Characters do not need rest.

There is a strange piece of advice that writers repeat to each other that goes, “You can’t have fast pace all the time; you have to let characters rest and build in slow-paced scenes.” 

I know this, because Inevitably, if I give gentle critique feedback that a scenes is dragging a bit (because the characters are sitting around making idle chitchat, with no goal), the scene is defended strongly using this logic.

But listen to what Chris says.  It’s not that scenes should be slow/boring or be designed to give your character a Snickers break. 

No.

Your scenes should build to the big turning points.  The high highs and low lows are end destinations.  You don’t just leap from devastating low to another low low, to an incredible high, and back again. 

And you certainly don’t take a break off from the story.

You build scene upon scene in a way that propels your story forward.

Awesome.

#2 Pacing is created within a scene and across scenes.

We writers often focus on scene creation and scene rewrites, but audiences and readers experience the dynamic of a story unfolding and building into larger turning points.  And these turning points build into a larger experience called Your Book (or Movie).

Readers don’t care about the scene unit nearly as much as we do.  They care about what just happened to the characters, what’s happening now, and what might happened in the story future.

Because the story is going somewhere.

Because there’s a meaning to be made out of what happens.

Because you’re telling them as the writer that what they read (or see) is important and matters when it all comes together.

Because of a hundred different reasons.

So when we think of pacing, let’s try to think of story pacing and not just scene pacing, okay?

Good.

And if you’re interested in learning more from Christopher Vogler, check out his new book.  Or join me at the November 2011 Story Master Conference.  I’d love to meet the Freelance-Zone Peeps!

This article is the 6th in Diane’s craft-of-fiction-writing series on Pacing:

  1. How to Be a Pacing Genius
  2. Pacing and the Thirst for Something Fresh (Blood Optional)
  3. You Can’t Look Away: Pacing & The Riveting Story
  4. Shot Through the Heart: Threat, Consequences, and Emotions Equal Pacing
  5. BONUS:  Don’t Hold Back – Pacing Advice by Literary Agent Donald Maass
  6. BONUS with Hollywood Story Consultant Christopher Vogler
  7. The “Oh, Crap!” Factor: Pacing in Real Time
  8. Bam! Pow! Wham! Good Pacing Causes Immediate Reaction
  9. Situation Critical: Pacing’s Need for an Unknown Outcome
  10. Game Changers: Pacing, Plot Twits, and Reader Engagement
  11. Pacing that Matters: It All Comes Down to Characters
  12. Your True Opponent: Pacing’s Race to Outwit the Reader
  13. 9 Pacing Techniques, 1 Scene on Fire

Diane Holmes Crop 1Diane writes two alternating columns for Freelance-Zone:Fiction-Zone: Leaps in Fiction Mastery and Marketing-Zone:Marketing-Zone: Marketing Yourself and Your Book.

She’s the Founder and Chief Alchemist of Pitch University – “Learn to pitch your book from the AGENTS and EDITORS who make their living at it.  Learn.  Pitch.  Sell.”

Don’t Hold Back – Pacing Advice by Literary Agent Donald Maass

Fiction-Zone: Leaps in Fiction Mastery by Diane Holmes

I spoke with Literary  Agent and Writing Instructor Donald Maass about his new 4-day Story Masters workshop with Christopher Vogler & James Scott Bell

(I’m currently doing a series over at Pitch University on this workshop, which comers to Houston, TX November 3 – 6, 2011.  I’ll be there, so say hi if you’re there too.)

Of course, I took the opportunity to ask him a couple questions about my Freelance Zone passions (this series on Pacing, and my current Marketing-Zone series on Author Branding.)

So today, I have a bonus for you on Pacing.  Here’s what I asked  Don….

Diane:  One of the hardest things to discern as a novelist is how your scene’s pacing translates to the reader.  Can you give us an example of the best rewrite you’ve seen to correct a pacing issue?

Donald Maass: Absolutely. 

Historical mystery writer Anne Perry several years ago wrote a stand-alone historical novel, The Sheen on the Silk, set in a late century of the Byzantine empire.  The first draft dragged.  You could have said pace was an issue, but I could see that the author was holding back. 

I told her to add 75,000 words. 

The Sheen on the Silk

That did the trick.  With so much extra room—really, freedom—the author let loose.  The story soared.  The delivery manuscript came in almost exactly 75,000 words longer.  The pace of the story was terrific.  There was far more material but also higher tension throughout.  What was on the page now mattered.

3 Reasons Don’s Pacing Example Rocks

#1  Pacing is a way of viewing story, not a gimmick.

It’s about a deeper story that matters, a story where the author really let’s loose.  This is why pacing isn’t just about “write shorter sentences,” which is what I often hear, when I ask other writers about pacing.  Pacing speaks to the heart of story.

#2  Write bolder not “faster.”

Pacing belongs to the brave writer, the unflinching hand.  Small, quiet scenes and large, explosive scenes can both have excellent pacing.  You do this with bold writing, a daring story, and the guts to write the WHOLE thing, not a pale imitation.

#3  Stories and storytellers are meant to soar. 

It’s not enough to write the scenes.  It’s not enough to master the mechanics.  And it’s never enough to be average. 

Seize the day, my friend.  Grab your story and take it to the heavens.  Blow the doors off your soul.  Let your passion yell, “Hell, Yes!” on every page, because even you didn’t know you were capable of writing that much truth.

That sense of soaring?  It’s the taste of great pacing.

So many scenes and manuscripts just skim across the top of the story, the character exchanging lines that even they know are fake.  You can feel the pace drag already.

But scenes (and pacing) that soar?  That can earn you reviews like this for The Sheen on the Silk:

“As the danger, betrayals, and dead bodies mount, Perry conveys an earnest message about obsession, sacrifice, and faith at a dazzling crossroads of East and West civilizations.”

— Publishers Weekly

This article is the 5th in Diane’s craft-of-fiction-writing series on Pacing:

  1. How to Be a Pacing Genius
  2. Pacing and the Thirst for Something Fresh (Blood Optional)
  3. You Can’t Look Away: Pacing & The Riveting Story
  4. Shot Through the Heart: Threat, Consequences, and Emotions Equal Pacing
  5. BONUS with Literary Agent Donald Maass
  6. The “Oh, Crap!” Factor: Pacing in Real Time
  7. Bam! Pow! Wham! Good Pacing Causes Immediate Reaction
  8. Situation Critical: Pacing’s Need for an Unknown Outcome
  9. Game Changers: Pacing, Plot Twits, and Reader Engagement
  10. Pacing that Matters: It All Comes Down to Characters
  11. Your True Opponent: Pacing’s Race to Outwit the Reader
  12. 9 Pacing Techniques, 1 Scene on Fire

Diane Holmes Crop 1Diane writes two alternating columns for Freelance-Zone:Fiction-Zone: Leaps in Fiction Mastery and Marketing-Zone:Marketing-Zone: Marketing Yourself and Your Book.

She’s the Founder and Chief Alchemist of Pitch University – “Learn to pitch your book from the AGENTS and EDITORS who make their living at it.  Learn.  Pitch.  Sell.”

5 Questions With Diane Holmes

Diane is the Founder and Chief Alchemist over at Pitch-University, a site devoted to teaching writers to pitch their books and make wise career decisions.

She also writes two columns here at Freelance-Zone:

  • Marketing-Zone: Marketing Yourself and Your Book
  • Fiction-Zone: Leaps in Fiction Mastery

1. How did you wind up a writer?

Diane Mosiac Crop The best way possible.  I was a Reader.  Yes, big ‘r.’  In fact, I was reading adult fiction by the 5th grade.

But I’m not one of those writers who knew as an toddler they wanted to write.  I only knew after graduating with a marketing degree and working as a Systems Engineer (Programmer)  for 4 years.  Yeah, then I knew.

What am I doing on a corporate death march?  I’m supposed to be a writer!

And so I quit my job.  (Don’t laugh.  It only seems rash in hind-sight.)

2. Was the road to being a published writer what you expected? Why or why not? 

Uh…No.  No, no, no, no, no-no-no-no-noooooooooooooo,

So, no, I didn’t expect the years and years of rejection.   

You have to remember, I’m a novelist.  It can take years to complete a project.  And then there are the years of rejection that can follow.  The industry is changing now, but even now, the traditional publishers are a slow lot.

I can tell you, I’m extremely stubborn.  That’s why I’m still here, and that’s saying something.

3. What has been your best moment or biggest accomplishment as a writer?

Well, I’ve co-owned a small press, had plays produced, founded and run large writers’ groups.  And  umpteen other things.

But my best moment is always the moment I know I just wrote a sentence that nailed it.  I got to the truth of it, whatever it is, and no one else has ever said what I’ve just written in exactly that way.

Ultimately, I’m a storyteller.  And when story and the writing of it transcends me, then that’s the moment I’m a better person for having written it.  I’ve transmuted words into story, shaped experience into meaning, and participated in a form of  myth-making that expands back thousands of years, and reaches forward into the future even longer than that..

That’s a pretty good moment.

I love everything about writing.  And this ability to explore concepts and make meaning out of experience is not just found in storytelling, but it’s also present in any form of writing, including my articles here.

4. What has been your most difficult moment?

Being stuck.  And writing and writing and writing every day, all day, yet only being more stuck.  This is the sort of experience that breaks your heart, because it’s so illogical.  So bad-bad-bad.

Creative careers have a downside that is related to how very much you care and how big you dream.There aren’t many careers where you can end up broken in exactly this way.  

5. Can you share your top piece of writing advice with Freelance-Zone readers?

Be a lifetime writer. 

Care deeply. Always be working toward mastery. Love your industry.  Show up to your career with the attitude that you’re on the journey to greatness.  Not acclaim.  Not that kind of greatness. The greatness of  an authentic, fully-explored, powerful interaction with readers.

Be that.